Paper Mario World: Ch.3 Magical Mischief!

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Billy12510

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Hey everyone! I'm just starting my newest story: Paper Mario World! First off, NO! I didn't make a Paper Mario themed story because this month's VGL is the Paper Mario series, I've had this idea for quite bit since around the halfway point of Super Circuit. Making a Mario-themed Reality TV Show type of story works apparently, but will an RPG still story work? Probably not, but I'll be fun to watch me struggle with this one right? Right? Oh well, I've rambled long enough. I'll mainly explain the story-line now. In Super Circuit, Bowser kidnapped Peach for the billionth time just today, and now Mario has to save her for the billionth time today. This'll encorporate Maria's story design in splitting the chapters into episodes, so before I finally actually start...
Thank You Maria for coming up with this story design motivation!

Now... EPICER Voice time!

PROLOUGE
EPISODE 1!

?: Can you believe that Luigi?
Luigi: I know! Bowser actually won for once?
?: *facepalm* NO! I mean Peach got kidnapped by Bowser's cronies! I gotta save her! Watch the house while I'm gone! -exits via front door-
Luigi: Mario wait! You forgot your hammer!
Outside Mario's house...
Mario: Why am I feeling I forgot something?
?: Hey dirtball! Looking for trouble?
Mario: Hammer Bros.? Oh crud! I forgot my hammer!
Hammer Bro A: Too bad kid, we'll end your game before it starts!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:10/10
FP:5/5
Limit: Unuseable now

Hammer Bro A
HP:3/3
FP:1/1

Hammer Bro B
HP:3/3
FP:1/1

Mario: What can I do?
Action List
Jump
Item
Limit
Mario: I guess I'll use my trademark jump!

Hammer Bro A takes 1 damage.
Hammer Bro A swings a hammer
Mario dodges
Author's Note: Hammer swings get dodged easily. Well they should anyway.
Hammer Bro B swings a hammer
Mario takes 1 damage
Mario: That the best you got? This'll be over in no time!
Mario Stats
HP:9/10
FP:5/5
Limit: Unuseable now

Hammer Bro A
HP:2/3
FP:1/1

Hammer Bro B
HP:3/3
FP:1/1

Action List
Jump
Item
Limit
Mario: Jump time!
Hammer Bro A takes 1 damage
Hammer Bro A: Heh-heh your not entirely weak after all! Guess I should stop playing around...
Hammer Bro A uses Power Hammer
Mario takes 3 damage
Hammer Bro B swings a hammer
Mario takes 1 damage
Mario: Ugh... not as weak as I thought...
Mario Stats
HP:5/10 Danger!
FP:5/5
Limit: Useable now

Hammer Bro A
HP:1/3
FP:0/1

Hammer Bro B
HP:3/3
FP:1/1
Mario: Limit huh...
Action List
Jump
Item
Limit
Limit List
Super Mario
Author's Note: Super Mario boosts ATT and DEF by 3 for 3 turns. Using a Limit counts as a turn
Mario becomes Super Mario!
Mario: NOW WHAT ARE YOU GOING TO DO!
Hammer Bro A swings a hammer
Mario took no damage
Hammer Bro B uses Power Hammer
Mario took no damage
Hammer Bros.: Uh-oh...

Mario Stats
HP:5/10 Danger!
FP:5/5
Limit: In use
Status: ATT+ DEF+

Hammer Bro A
HP:1/3
FP:0/1

Hammer Bro B
HP:3/3
FP:0/1

Mario: You're through! Both of you!
Action List
Jump
Item
Limit
Mario jumps on Hammer Bro A
Author's Note: No comment.
Hammer Bro A takes KO damage!

Hammer Bro B cowers in corner

Mario Stats
HP:5/10 Danger!
FP:5/5
Limit: In use
Status: ATT+ DEF+

Hammer Bro A
HP:K.O.
FP:0/1

Hammer Bro B
HP:3/3
FP:0/1

Action List
Jump
Item
Limit

Mario jumps on Hammer Bro B
Hammer Bro B dodged somehow!
Author's Note: Don't want to make this fight TOO one-sided.
Hammer Bro B cried

Mario Stats
HP:5/10 Danger!
FP:5/5
Limit: Unuseable Now
Status: None

Hammer Bro A
HP:K.O.
FP:0/1

Hammer Bro B
HP:3/3
FP:0/1

Mario: Now what... -slaps pocket- A Fire Flower? Nice random find!
Action List
Jump
Item
Limit

Mario uses a Fire Flower
All enemies take 3 damage

Mario: I won!
Mario Exp: 10/10
Mario Leveled Up!
MAX HP Up by 5
Mario learned Multibounce
Author's Note: You probably know what Multibounce does, but if you don't I'll tell you what it does, Mario jumps on all enemies and deals damage.

Mario: So much for them. Hey they dropped a hammer!
Mario got the Hammer! He can now do the Hammer command in battle!
Mario: Now what? I guess I'll go to Toad Town to see if I can find where Peachis being held.

TO BE CONTINUED... I know this story-type sounds kinda silly, but I think I'm actually going to enjoy writeing this!
 
PROLOUGE EPISODE 2
Last time on Paper Mario World, Mario found out Peach had been kidnapped (-gasp-, really?) again, so he went on a quest to save her again. He encountered and defeated two Hammer Bros. that tried stopping him and got a hammer. Now he goes to Toad Town to look for anything that might put him on Bowser's trail.

Mario: There's Toad Town. But where are all the Toads?
?: The town is now under the rule of the great King Goomba sir! Now who are you?
Mario: Goombas?
Goomba A: It's Mario!
Goomba B: Get him!
BATTLE START!

Mario Stats
HP:15/15
FP:5/5
Limit: Unuseable now

Goomba A
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Goomba B
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Giant Goomba
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Action List
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit
Mario: Hm... now's when Multibounce might help out...

Jump Menu
Regular Jump-0 FP
Multibounce-1 FP

Mario uses Multibounce
All enemies took 1 damage

Goomba A uses Headbonk
Mario took 1 damage
Goomba B uses Headbonk
Mario dodges quickly
Giant Goomba uses Headbonk
Mario took 2 damage

Mario Stats
HP:12/15
FP:4/5
Limit: Unuseable now

Goomba A
HP:1/2
FP:0/0

Goomba B
HP:1/2
FP:0/0

Giant Goomba
HP:4/5
FP:0/0

Action List
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit

Mario Jumped on Giant Goomba
Giant Goomba took 1 damage

Goomba A used Headbonk
Mario took 1 damage
Goomba B used Headbonk
Mario took 1 damage
Giant Goomba used Headbonk
Mario took 2 damage

Mario Stats
HP:8/15
FP:4/5
Limit: Useable now

Goomba A
HP:1/2
FP:0/0

Goomba B
HP:1/2
FP:0/0

Giant Goomba
HP:3/5
FP:0/0

Action List
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit

Mario became Super Mario!
Goomba A used Headbonk
Mario took no damage
Goomba B used Headbonk
Mario took no damage
Giant Goomba used Headbonk
Mario took no damage

Mario: Any last words?
Giant Goomba: I'll never give up!
Goomba A:...
Goomba B:...

Mario Stats
HP:8/15
FP:4/5
Limit: In Use

Goomba A
HP:1/2
FP:0/0

Goomba B
HP:1/2
FP:0/0

Giant Goomba
HP:3/5
FP:0/0

Action List
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit

Mario: Bye-bye!
Mario uses Multibounce
All enemies took 4 damage
Mario Wins!
Mario Exp:19/30

Mario: King Goomba huh? Sounds like the jerk who locked me in Peach's Castle that one time...
?: Mario?
Mario: Toad?
?: Yo! Mario! You came to save us!
Mario: Save you? From who?
?: The Goombas! One day they just marched in and we all freaked out and locked ourselves in our homes.
Mario: Then why are you out here? And what's your name?
?: My name? Oh how rude of me! My name's Toadster. Don't know why my folks named me that though.
Toadster: I'm tryin' to liberate this town! I'm whatcha call a Toad Warrior! I'm pretty good with a spear.
Mario: Mind helping me out then?
Toadster: No prob! Let's go see Merlin, he might now where Peach is.
Mario: How'd you-
Toadster: It's the story that's sweeping the Mushroom Kingdom Mario! Everyone knows what happened.
Mario: Then let's go see Merlin!
Toadster joined your party!
Toadster's Skills
Spear Rush-charge at enemy with spear 0 FP
Spear Toss-throw spear at enemy, no matter where they are. 1 FP

At Merlon's house...
Mario: Merlin, do you know where Peach is?
Merlin: Tut-tut-tut Mario! First you must free the town from the Goombas!
Mario: Of course! So... where's King Goomba then?
Merlin: Hm... it says... east. To the east... hillsides.... AH! Goomba Hills! King Goomba is there.
Toadster: Let's go there then!
Merlin: Yes. You should. Now to answer your other question Mario. Peach in held in Bowser's Castle. The front gate is locked. To open it you need 7 Boss Keys. King Goomba has one. Now... -makes table appear- these items shall help you on your quest.
Items Gotten
Mushroom- Restores 5 HP
Honey Syrup- Restores 5 FP
Fire Flower- deals 3 damage to all enemies
Tasty Tonic- lets you recover from all negative status condtions
Mario: Thanks Merlon! We're off to Goomba Hills!

Next time on Paper Mario World... Mario and Toadster take off towards Goomba Hills.
 
You know what? I'm enjoying this story more then even The Great Galaxy Race!
Anyway, in the last episode, Mario made it to Toad Town to find it was overrun by Goombas. He then met up with Toadter, a Toad Warrior, and the two decided to join forces to save Toad Town. Now after seeking Merlon's advice, the two head off to Goomba Hills to defeat King Goomba and get the first Boss Key to Bowser's Castle. Behold the epic voice cause now its time for...
CHAPTER 1! King Goomba's Royal Tantrum!

Mario: Hey Toadster. What the heck's a Toad Warrior anyway?
Toadster: Toad Warrior's are special Toads trained in thearts of the spear, the bow, and magic.
Mario: Wow. If Peach had Toads like you for guards Peach would never have been kidnapped in the first place.
Toadster: It's not that easy. We Toad Warriors never stay in the same place too long. But I would like a job for her majesty's guard service. It would make my day.
Mario: -laughs- Ah. Anyway, do you know where Goomba Hills are?
Toadster: I do. We need to go through Woody Woods to go there. The place is full of Monty Moles and Piranha Plants. King Goomba might think we're on our way to him so he'll probably have his troops there waiting in ambush.
Mario: Is there anyway around the Woods?
Toadster: Yeah. Chain Chomp Dog Pound or Mr. Blizzard's Arctic Tundra?
Mario: On second thought I'll go through the woods.
Toadster: Let's go!
Inside Woody Woods...
Mario: This place is denser then I thought.
?: Mario! Bluh-huh-huh!
Toadster: It's a Piranha Plant!
Piranha Plant: A firey Piranha Plant! I'll roast you Mario!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:8/15
FP:3/5
Limit: Unuseable Now
Toadster Stats
HP:10/10
FP:5/5

Firey Piranha
HP:10/10
FP:5/5

Toadster: Hey Mario. I know a lot about these guys. Wanna listen?
Mario: Anything that'll make this fight easier.
Toadster: Well first off it'll try to eat you if you jump on it. I'd use a hammer based attack or an item. It'll also spit fireballs at us. If they hit you you'll be burned and take 1 damage for 3 turns.
Mario: Anything else?
Toadster: Not really, it doesn't look strong, and has no defense. You should have any easy time with it as long as you don't jump.
Mario: Let's get started then!
Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Items
Limit

Mario hammers Firey Piranha.
Firey Piranha takes 2 damage!
Author's Note: Yes the hammer deals 2 damage instead of 1 for Mario.
Toadster Actions
Attacks
Items
Switch

Attack List
Spear Rush
Spear Toss-1 FP

Toadster rushed the enemy with a spear!
Firey Piranha took 1 damage

Firey Piranha bit Mario!
Mario took 1 damage

Mario Stats
HP:7/15
FP:3/5
Limit: Unuseable Now
Toadster Stats
HP:10/10
FP:5/5

Firey Piranha
HP:7/10
FP:5/5

Mario used Hammer on Firey Piranha
Firey Piranha took 2 damage
Toadster Rushed the enemy with a spear!
Firey Piranha took 1 damage

Firey Piranha: This isn't good... I'll be done for if I can't deal any real damage soon...
?: We'll help ya!
Mario: Goombas?
Toadster: No! Spiky Goombas!
2 Spiky Goombas join the fight. 1 in front of Firey Piranha, 1 behind Firey Piranha.
Toadster: It's obvious, but you'll be hurt if you jump on a Spiky Goomba. They also deal 2 damage since they have the spike. A hammer is the best choice, but my Spear Throw can also help hitting the ones behind the front enemy.
Mario: Would the Fire Flower hurt the Firey Piranha?
Toadster: Yep.
Mario: Then I've got a plan.

Mario Stats
HP:7/15
FP:3/5
Limit: Unuseable Now
Toadster Stats
HP:10/10
FP:5/5

Spiky Goomba A
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Firey Piranha
HP:4/10
FP:5/5

Spiky Goomba B
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Mario used a Fire Flower
All enemies take 3 damage
Spiky Goombas A & B took K.O. damage!

Toadster Rushed the enemy with a spear!
Firey Piranha took K.O. damage!

Mario and Co. Win!
Mario Exp: 30/30
Mario Leveled Up!
MAX FP 5->10
Mario Learned Power Jump
Author's Note: Power Jump is the basic jump, but with more power. Costs 2 FP
Mario Exp: 40/50
Toadster Exp: 10/10
Toadster Leveled Up!
MAX HP 10->15
Toadster Exp: 21/30

Spiky Goomba A: We got taken down!
Spiky Goomba B: We need to tell King Goomba right away that Mario's here!
Spiky Goomba A: Right! Let's leave them to the G.G.S.!
Mario: G.G.S.?
Spiky Goomba B: Run!
Toadster: G.G.S? What's that I wonder.
Mario: Let's hope we find out about them before they find out about us.
Toadster: Right. If we keep walking east from here we should reach a crossroads. If we go south at the cross roads we should reach Goomba Hills in a matter of days.
Mario: That's great to know. Let's-a go!

Halfway to the crossroads...
Mario: Hey! A treasure chest!
Toadster: Let's see what's inside...
?: Hold it bro!
Mario: Monty Moles...
Monty Mole C: Hey Brolorado, whatcha doin?
Monty Mole B: Looking for trouble huh Bro-kenstein?
Mario: Ugh... these Bro jokes are annoying me. Let's get these guys.

Mario Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toaster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:5/5

Monty Mole A
HP:4/4
FP:1/1

Monty Mole B
HP:4/4
FP:1/1

Monty Mole C
HP:4/4
FP:1/1

Monty Mole D
HP:4/4
FP:1/1

Toadster: These guys'll attack by throwing rocks at us. They'll also try burrowing into the ground. It takes two turns to complete the move. If you have the Quake Hammer ability, you can cancel the move and deal twice as much damage as normal. Power Jump deals 4 damage in its current state, which is their MAX HP, so that works too. But you can't hit them while their underground. Does that help?
Mario: A lot.
Mario's Actions
Jump
Hammer
Items
Limit
Jump Menu
Jump
Multibounce-1 FP
Power Jump-2 FP

Mario Power Jumps!
Monty Mole A takes K.O. damage

Toadster's Actions
Attacks
Items
Switch

Toadster rushed the enemy with a spear!
Monty Mole B took 1 damage

All the Monty Moles threw rocks!
Mario took 2 damage
Toadster took 1 damage

Hate to cut the story in the middle of a fight, but since I've been going at this for about an hour, I'll pick up with the rest of the fight tomorrow.
 
CHAPTER 1! Episode 2!
Last time Mario and Toadster began trekking through Woody Woods after defeating a fire-spewing Piranha Plant. After the two came across a treasure chest, the two had to defeat 4 Monty Moles to get what was inside. And now, the rest of that fight!

Mario Stats
HP:13/15
FP:8/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:14/15
FP:5/5

Monty Mole A
K.O.

Monty Mole B
HP:3/4
FP:1/1

Monty Mole C
HP:4/4
FP:1/1

Monty Mole D
HP:4/4
FP:1/1

Mario used Power Jump
Monty Mole C took K.O. damage!

Toadster rushed the enemy with a spear!
Monty Mole B took 1 damage

Monty Mole B threw a rock!
Toadster took 1 damage

Monty Mole D burrowed underground

Mario Stats
HP:13/15
FP:6/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:5/5

Monty Mole A
K.O.

Monty Mole B
HP:2/4
FP:1/1

Monty Mole C
K.O.

Monty Mole D
HP:4/4
FP:1/1

Mario jumped on Monty Mole B!
Monty Mole B took 1 damage

Toadster rushed the enemy with a spear!
Monty Mole B took K.O. damage

Monty Mole D rushed at Mario from underground!
Mario took 2 damage

Mario Stats
HP:11/15
FP:6/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:143/15
FP:5/5

Monty Mole A
K.O.

Monty Mole B
K.O.

Monty Mole C
K.O.

Monty Mole D
HP:4/4
FP:0/1

Mario used Power Jump
Monty Mole D took K.O. damage!
Mario and Co. Win!
Mario Exp: 50/50
Mario Leveled Up!
MAX HP: 15->20
Mario Exp: 52/125
Toadster Exp: 30/30
Toadster Leveled Up!
Attack strength: 1->2
Toadster Exp: 33/50

Mario: I wonder what's in this chest...
-opens chest-
YOU GOT A BOO SHEET!
Description: Turns person it used on invisible for 3 turns, making all attacks on that person miss.
Toadster: Nice find! Let's go to the crossroads!
At the crossroads...
Mario: So we go south from here right?
Toadster: Yeah. Let's hurry.
?: Hold it lasagna-boy!
Mario: Huh? Wario?!
Wario: That's right! I'm tired of just standing back while you save the world. Where's my chance to be a star!
Mario: Boo-hoo. Poor Wailio doesn't get no respect.
Wario: What the? WAILIO?! That's it! Now you'll get it!
BATTLE START!

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:10/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:5/5

Wario
HP:10/10
FP:5/5
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster: This is gonna be as easy as the enemies we've been fighting up till now. I think Wario's stronger and his attacks'll deal 2 damage instead of 1.
Mario: He has his Wario Bike, what'll that do?
Toadster: I think he'll hit both of us with it. That Boo Sheet you picked up might help here. When he's weak, he may transform into Wario Man. When he does, he gets an attack boost a he'll be invincible for 2 turns after it's use.
Mario: Let's be cautious then.

Mario's Actions
Jump
Hammer
Items
Limit

Jump Menu
Jump
Multibounce-1 FP
Power Jump-2 FP

Mario did a Power Jump on Wario!
Wario took 3 damage
Mario: He must have a defense point.
Toadster: Might be the helmet.
Wario: Here I come!
Wario drove the Wario Bike like a madman!
Mario and Co. take 2 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:18/20
FP:8/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:5/5

Wario
HP:7/10
FP:4/5
Limit: Unuseable Now

Mario did a Power Jump on Wario!
Wario took 3 damage!
Toadster rushed Wario with a spear!
Wario took 1 damage!
Wario punched Mario!
Mario took 2 damage!
Wario: This isn't looking too good. Guess its time to play my ace in the hole. WARIO MAN!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wario transformed into Wario Man!

Mario Stats
HP:16/20
FP:6/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:5/5

Wario
HP:3/10
FP:4/5
Limit: In use
Status: ATT+2, Invincible-2 turns left

Mario swung a hammer!
Wario took no damage
Toadster rushed with a spear!
Wario took no damage
Wario: That the best you got? I didn't feel a thing!
Wario drove the Wario Bike at an extreme speed!
Mario and Toadster got hit by the bike twice before it stopped! Both recieve 8 damage! Sheesh!

Mario Stats
HP:8/20
FP:6/10
Limit: Useable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:5/15 DANGER!
FP:5/5

Wario
HP:3/10
FP:4/5
Limit: In use
Status: ATT+2, Invincible-1 turn left

Mario: You aren't the only one with an ace...
Mario's Actions
Jump
Hammer
Items
Limit
Mario became Super Mario! Attack and Defense increase by 3!
Wario: -gulp-
Wario turned Mario and Co. into a speedbump twice!
Mario took 2 damage!
Toadster took K.O. damage!
Wario reverted to normal!
Mario: Toadster! Grr... I'll give you epic punishment for this Wario!

Mario Stats
HP:6/20
FP:6/10
Limit: In Use
Status: ATT+3, DEF+3, 2 turns left

Toadster Stats
K.O

Wario
HP:3/10
FP:4/5
Limit: Unuseable Now
Status: None

Mario used Power Jump!
Wario took K.O. damage!

Mario and Co. Win!
Mario Exp: 77/125
Toadster Exp: 50/50
Toadster Leveled Up!
MAX FP: 5->10
Toadster Exp: 58/125

Mario: And don't come back!
Wario: Pfft! I'll be back! And when I do! I'll trounce you Super Mario!

Next time on Paper Mario World... Mario and Toadster reach the end of Woody Woods!
 
Chapter 1 Episode 3!
Last time on Paper Mario World, Mario ran into his long-time rival Wario, and the two of them got into a fight. After defeating Wario, Mario and Toadster begin heading towards the exit of Woody Woods.

Mario: Man that creep doesn't know when to give up.
Toadster: Ow...
Mario: You ok?
Toadster: -grunts in pain- Ack! I'm fine.
Mario: Well here eat this. -gives Mushroom-
Toadster: Thanks.
Toadster feels better now.
Mario: Well then, let's keep going then.
A little while later.
Mario: Aw... that Piranha Plant is crying.
Piranha Plant: Wah! Mom? Dad? Where'd you go?
Mario: Hey little guy! What's wrong?
Piranha Plant: Ah! Mario! D-don't hurt m-me...
Mario: I'm not, there there... tell Uncle Mario what's wrong.
Piranha Plant: Uncle Mario?
Mario: Do you want me to help or not?
Piranha Plant: Yessir. My name's Peewee Piranha. Everyone calls me Peewee though. I'm looking for my parents. Have you seen them?
Mario: Sorry I haven't. -lightbulb- Hey! Let's look together!
Peewee: OK!
Peewee joined your party!
Peewee's Skills
Piranha Chomp- chomp an enemy-0 FP
Putred Breath- breath a poisonus gas at the enemy to inflict Poison status. 2 FP
Toadster: If you ever want to switch partner's in battle, just use the Switch command.
Peewee: Alright then! Let's go!
A little ways down the path...
Toadster: That's the exit to Woody Woods Mario.
Mario: Alright we found it. But we shouldn't leave till we find Peewee's parents first.
?: You don't need to worry about them.
Peewee: What's that?
?: The G.G.S! The Giant Goomba Squad!
Mario: What do you know about Peewee's parents?
Giant Goomba: There in Bowser's Dungeon awaiting trial for treason.
Giant Spiky Goomba: They won't join Bowser's army...
Giant Paragoomba: So we'll put them in jail till they decide to join.
Giant Spiky Goomba: If we had their kid, they'd be more likely to join in exchange for the tyke's freedom.
Toadster: You monsters! We'll KO you right here!
Giant Goomba: Woah! Those words hurt little Toad! -whistles-
Toadster: Wah!
Mario: Toadster?
?: Blerghergherg
Peewee: A bad Pirhana Plant!
Toadster: Mario! The vines, they're holding me against the tree! They're pinning my arms down!
Mario: Come on little one! We have to save him!
Peewee: Alright!
BATTLE START!
Mario's Stats
HP:20/20
FP:10/10
Limit: Unuseable now

Peewee's Stats
HP:10/10
FP:10/10

Giant Goomba
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Giant Spiky Goomba
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Giant Paragoomba
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Piranha Plant
HP:3/3
FP:0/0

Toadster: You can't jump on the Giant Spiky Goomba. You can't hammer the Giant Paragoomba either. And jumping in the Piranha Plant's mouth will only have negative effects.

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit
Switch

Mario used Power Jump on Giant Paragoomba!
Giant Paragoomba took 4 damage!
Giant Paragoomba's wings were clipped!

Peewee's Actions
Attacks
Items
Switch

Peewee used his Putred Breath on Giant Spiky Goomba!
Giant Spiky Goomba was poisoned!

Giant Goomba headbonked Mario!
Mario took 2 damage!
Giant Spiky Goomba headbonked Mario!
Mario took 4 damage!
Giant Paragoomba headbonked Peewee!
Peewee bit back!
Giant Paragoomba took K.O. damage!
Piranha Plant bit Mario!
Mario took 1 damage!
Giant Spiky Goomba took 1 damage from Poison!

Mario's Stats
HP:13/20
FP:8/10
Limit: Unuseable now

Peewee's Stats
HP:10/10
FP:8/10

Giant Goomba
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Giant Spiky Goomba
HP:4/5
FP:0/0
Status: Poison, 8 turns left

Giant Paragoomba
K.O.

Piranha Plant
HP:3/3
FP:0/0

Mario Power Jumped Giant Goomba!
Giant Goomba took 4 damage!
Peewee took a bite out of Piranha Plant!
Piranha Plant took 2 damage!

Giant Goomba tried Headbonking Peewee!
Peewee bit back!
Giant Goomba took K.O. damage!

Giant Spiky Goomba headbonked Mario!
Mario took 4 damage!
Piranha Plant bit Peewee!
Peewee took 1 damage!
Giant Spiky Goomba took 1 damage from Poison!

Mario's Stats
HP:9/20
FP:6/10
Limit: Useable now

Peewee's Stats
HP:9/10
FP:8/10

Giant Goomba
K.O.

Giant Spiky Goomba
HP:3/5
FP:0/0
Status: Poison, 7 turns left

Giant Paragoomba
K.O.

Piranha Plant
HP:1/3
FP:0/0

Mario: I can live without using my Limit.

Mario Hammered Giant Spiky Goomba!
Giant Spiky Goomba took 2 damage!
Peewee bit Piranha Plant!
Piranha Plant took K.O. damage!
-thud!- Huh? Toadster fell from the ceiling!
Toadster: Phew! Thanks guys!
Giant Spiky Goomba: Out of the way!
Giant Spiky Goomba headbonked Toadster out of annoyance!
Toadster took 4 damage!
Toadster: Hey! I'm not in this fight!
Giant Spiky Goomba took 1 damage from Poison!
Giant Spiky Goomba was KOd!
Mario and Co. win!
Mario Exp: 94/125
Toadster Exp: 75/125
Peewee Exp: 27/30

Mario: That was a dirty trick. Even for Bowser!
Toadster: Hey. The vine fell with me. It could make a good rope to carry you across gaps.
Mario: Let's take it then!
You got the Vine!
Item Description- A vine from a Piranha Plant. It's sturdy enough to use as a rope ladder.

Peewee: I'll go with you guys to rescue my parents from Bowser!
Mario: That's wonderful! Come on you two! Let's-a Go!

Next Time on Paper Mario World, Mario and Co. go to Goomba Hills and begin their fight against King Goomba.
 
Spoiler containing absence of Episode 4 yesterday below.
I was working on it, but then my internet stopped working. It then rebooted, but all my work was gone. So I just decided that it was late and I'd post Episodes 4 & 5 on Friday so I'd have more time to come up with storyline.
Now let's try this again!
Chapter 1 Episode 4!
Last time on Paper Mario World, Mario and Toadster met Peewee Piranha. The tyke decided to join Mario and Co. after learning his parents were kidnapped by Bowser. Now the trio exit Woody Woods and head to Goomba Hills...

Mario: There's Goomba Hills!
Toadster: King Goomba's on the top of the hill there.
Peewee: We need to climb all the way up there?
Mario: Yep. Let's go.
At the foot of the hill.
Mario: Goombas everywhere?
Peewee: That would make sense.
?: Hey Mario!
Mario: The Goomba Bros.
Red Goomba: King Goomba told us to make sure you didn't get up to the top.
Blue Goomba: Cause if you get King Goomba's boss key...
R.Goomba: Shut it! Goombas! Charge!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:9/20
FP:6/10

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:10/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Goomba
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Paragoomba
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Blue Goomba
HP:6/6
FP:0/0

Toadster: It doesn't look like Blue Goomba is different then any other Goomba. It just has boosted HP. It'll call for reinforcements when weak, so be sure to deal with them.

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Items
Limit
Switch
Author's Note: Limit usage doesn't carry after battles, just like anyother status condition.
Mario swung a hammer
Goomba took K.O. damage!
Peewee took a bit out of Blue Goomba!
Blue Goomba took 2 damage
Paragoomba dove into Mario!
Mario took 1 damage.
Blue Goomba headbonked Peewee!
Peewee bit back!
Blue Goomba took 1 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:9/20
FP:6/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:10/10

Goomba
K.O

Paragoomba
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Blue Goomba
HP:3/6
FP:0/0

Mario swapped Partners!
Toadster came out!

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Toadster Actions
Attack
Item
Switch

Toadster threw his spear at Paragoomba!
Paragoomba took K.O. damage!
Blue Goomba headbonked Mario
Mario took 1 damage

Mario Stats
HP:8/20
FP:6/20
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Goomba
K.O.

Paragoomba
K.O.

Blue Goomba
HP:3/6
FP:0/0

Mario Power Jumped Blue Goomba!
Blue Goomba took K.O. damage!
Mario and Co. Win!
Mario Exp: 109/125
Toadster Exp: 90/125
Peewee Exp: 30/30
Peewee Leveled Up!
Peewee Learned the Skill Icy Breath!
Icy Breath- Breathe on an enemy and deal Ice damage. Might Freeze an enemy. Frozen enemies can't move for 3 turns and take 1 damage upon thawing. 3 FP
MAX FP: 10->15
Peewee Exp: 42/50

B.Goomba: Wah! You beat me up!
R.Goomba: You're useless! -runs-
Mario: If Blue's useless, why's Red running?
Peewee: Cause' they're Goombas?
Mario: -laughs-

Chapter 1 Episode 5!
Mario: Let's keep going! -hits tripwire-
Toadster: Ack! We're gonna fall!
The trio falls into a pit. At the bottom...
Mario: Ow... so that's why he ran.
Toadster: A chest?
Mario: Let's open it. -opens chest-
You got the Composite Bow!
Item Description: A durable Bow for shooting arrows. Do you know anyone who can use this?
Mario: Hmm... Toadster, you said Toad Warriors were trained in how to use these right?
Toadster: Yeah.
Mario: You should hold on to it then.
Toadster: Alright! This should make me stronger.
Toadster got the Composite Bow!
Toadster Learned Big Shot!
Big Shot- Fire arrows at all enemies no matter where they are. 3 FP

Mario: Huh? An elevator?
Peewee: Convieneint, but weird.
Toadster: Where does it go?
Mario: Let's see.
Elevator: Going to ground floor.
Mario and Co. exit at the foot of Goomba Hills.
Mario: We're at the same place as before!
Toadster: They set up the tripwire again... ! I got it! I'll shoot the tripwire with an arrow. Use the vine to latch onto that rock and we'll swing across the pit!
Mario: Let's hope it works!
Long Story Short, it worked.
Peewee: Phew!
Mario: Alright! Let's keep going!
Halfway up the hill...
R.Goomba: You made it? Hmmph, well I won't be as weak as my brother!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:8/20
FP:4/10
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:10/10
FP:9/10

Paragoomba A
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Spiky Goomba A
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Red Goomba
HP:9/9
FP:3/3

Spiky Goomba B
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Paragoomba B
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Toadster: I can deal with Red Goomba's cronies with Big Shot. Red Goomba has more HP then his Brother, he'll also use Multibonk to deal more damage to you. He can only use it once though.

Mario Power Jumped Red Goomba
Red Goomba took 4 damage

Toadster used Big Shot and fired arrows at all enemies!
Paragoombas A & B took K.O. damage!
Spiky Goombas A & B took K.O. damage!
Red Goomba took 2 damage!
Red Goomba Multibonked Mario!
Mario took 1 damage for each of 4 hits!

Mario Stats
HP:4/20 Danger!
FP:2/10

Toadster Stats
HP:10/10
FP:6/10

Paragoomba A
K.O.

Spiky Goomba A
K.O.

Red Goomba
HP:3/9
FP:0/3

Spiky Goomba B
K.O.

Paragoomba B
K.O.

Mario Power Jumped Red Goomba!
Red Goomba took K.O. damage!
Mario and Co. Win!
Mario Exp: 125/125
Mario Leveled Up!
MAX FP: 10->15
Mario Learned Piercing Blow
Piercing Blow-Deal damage with the hammer. Damage is not affected by an enemies defense, but invicible and invincible enemies won't take damage. 2 FP
Mario Exp: 136/200
Toadster Exp: 117/125
Peewee Exp: 50/50
Peewee Leveled Up!
MAX FP: 15->20
Icy Breath damage: 1->2
Peewee Exp: 69/125

Mario: We're so close to King Goomba.
Toadster: Let's Go then.

Next Time on Paper Mario World... Mario and Co. Face Off with King Goomba in the Chapter 1 Conclusion!
 
ImAJewSoICelebrateHanukkah said:
No offense, but this dialogue and battle structure is atrocious.
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Well you expect a 16 year old with too much time on his hands to be able to make GOOD Dialouge? I don't think I could change the dialouge all too much, but I'd be open to suggestions to make the battle structure better.

CHAPTER 1! Episode 6! The Conclusion...
Last time on Paper Mario World, the trio made its way to Goomba Hills and encountered King Goomba's servants, Red and Blue Goomba. after getting the Composite Bow from a dungeon in the hills, the trio continues their ascent up the hill.
Mario: -panting- This hill is so tall and exhausting to climb.
Toadster: Yeah, but King Goomba should be at the top.
R.Goomba: You're here already? King Goomba! They're here!
King Goomba: I see that! Hyper Goombas! Charge!
Mario: -yipe-
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:15/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:10/10
FP:6/10

Hyper Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2

Hyper Spiky Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2

Hyper Paragoomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2

Toadster: These Goombas can boost their attack by 8 with their charge ability. They have decent HP as well so this may be a hard fight we've gotten into.

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit
Switch

Mario Power Jumped H.Paragoomba!
H.Paragoomba took 4 damage and had its wings clipped!
Toadster used Big Shot to shoot arrows at everyone!
All enemies took 2 damage!

H.Goomba charged power!
ATT:1->9
H. Spiky Goomba charged power!
ATT:2->10
H.Paragoomba charged power!
ATT:1->9

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:13/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:10/10
FP:4/10

Hyper Goomba
HP:5/7
FP:1/2
Status: Charge

Hyper Spiky Goomba
HP:5/7
FP:1/2
Status: Charge

Hyper Paragoomba
HP:1/7
FP:1/2
Status: Grounded, Charge

Mario Power Jumped H.Goomba
H.Goomba took 4 damage!
Toadster used Big Shot to deal damage to all enemies!
H.Goomba and H.Paragoomba took K.O. damage!
H.Spiky Goomba took 2 damage!

H.Spiky Goomba Charge Headbonked Toadster!
Toadster took K.O. damage!
Toadster: Ugh... sorry Mario...
Mario: :(

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:11/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
K.O.

H.Goomba
K.O.

H.Spiky Goomba
HP:3/7
FP:1/2

H.Paragoomba
K.O.

Mario hammered the enemy!
H.Spiky Goomba dodged!
H.Spiky Goomba charged up his power!
ATT:2->10

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:11/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
K.O.

H.Goomba
K.O.

H.Spiky Goomba
HP:3/7
FP:0/2
Status: Charged

H.Paragoomba
K.O.

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Items
Limit
Switch

Item List
Honey Syrup
Tasty Tonic
Boo Sheet

Mario: Hmm...
Mario used a Boo Sheet!
Mario became invisible!

H.Spiky Goomba tried headboking Mario!
Mario can't be found!
H.Spiky Goomba's Charge wore off!

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:11/15
Limit: Unuseable Now
Status: Invisible, 2 turns left.

Toadster Stats
K.O.

H.Goomba
K.O.

H.Spiky Goomba
HP:3/7
FP:1/2

H.Paragoomba
K.O.

Mario swung a hammer at H.Spiky Goomba.
H.Spiky Goomba couldn't see where the attack came from!
H.Spiky Goomba took 2 damage!
There's no visible target for the enemy to attack!

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:11/15
Limit: Unuseable Now
Status: Invisible, 1 turn left.

Toadster Stats
K.O.

H.Goomba
K.O.

H.Spiky Goomba
HP:1/7
FP:0/2

H.Paragoomba
K.O.

Mario hammered H.Spiky Goomba
H.Spiky Goomba couldn't see where the attack came from!
H.Spiky Goomba took K.O. damage!
Mario and Co. win!
Mario Exp: 150/200
Toadster Exp: 125/125
Toadster Leveled Up!
MAX HP: 10->15
Toadster Exp: 131/200
Peewee Exp: 83/125

Mario: Bring it on already.
King Goomba: Red! Blue! Let's crush these fools!
Red & Blue: Yeah!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:11/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

King Goomba-BOSS
HP:13/13
FP:3/3

R.Goomba
HP:5/9
FP:0/3

B.Goomba
HP:3/6
FP:0/0

Toadster: For a Goomba King, he doesn't have any strong attacks. Red and Blue don't look like they've fully healed after the beating we put on them either. Should be easy. The King isn't without his loyal followers so he may call in reinforcements, which I can take down with Big Shot most likely.

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Items
Limit
Switch

Jump Menu
Jump
Multibounce
Power Jump

Mario opened with a Power Jump on Blue Goomba!
Blue Goomba took K.O. damage!

Toadster Actions
Skills
Items
Switch

Skills Menu
Spear Rush
Spear Toss
Big Shot

Toadster rushed the enemy with a spear!
King Goomba took 2 damage!

King Goomba kicked Mario!
Mario took 1 damage.
R.Goomba headbonked Mario
Mario took 1 damage.

Mario: That's it? Like you aren't like any other Goomba ever created.

Mario Stats
HP:18/20
FP:9/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

King Goomba-BOSS
HP:11/13
FP:3/3

R.Goomba
HP:5/9
FP:0/3

B.Goomba
K.O.

Mario Power Jumped R.Goomba!
R.Goomba took 4 damage!
Toadster rushed the enemy with a spear!
King Goomba took 2 damage.

King Goomba headbonked Mario!
Mario took 1 damage.
R.Goomba called in reinforcements!
A Goomba joined the fight!

Mario Stats
HP:17/20
FP:7/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

King Goomba-BOSS
HP:9/13
FP:3/3

R.Goomba
HP:1/9
FP:0/3

B.Goomba
K.O.

Goomba
HP:2/2
FP:0/0

Mario Power Jumped King Goomba!
King Goomba took 4 damage!
Toadster fired arrows at all enemies with Big Shot!
King Goomba took 2 damage.
R.Goomba and Goomba took K.O. damage!

King Goomba: Ugh... I may be done for... Giant Goombas!
2 Giant Goombas joined the fight.
Mario: Isn't it embarasing when your Goomba soldiers are stronger then you?
Toadster: I'd think so.

Mario Stats
HP:17/20
FP:5/15
Limit: Unuseable Now

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:8/10

King Goomba-BOSS
HP:3/13
FP:3/3

R.Goomba
K.O.

B.Goomba
K.O.

Goomba
K.O.

Giant Goomba A
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Giant Goomba B
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Mario Power Jumped King Goomba!
King Goomba took K.O. damage!
Giant Goomba A: No! King Goomba!
Giant Goomba B: If they defeated King Goomba, what hope do we have?
Giant Goomba A & B run off.
Mario and Co. Win!
Mario Exp: 185/200
Toadster Exp: 166/200
Peewee Exp: 118/125

King Goomba: No... I... only wanted to rule... Toad Town... like Bowser wanted...
Mario: Well that'll never happen.
King Goomba: Can... you be so sure... with Peach... he can make the Toads... do anything he wants them to... to get her back... including being ruled by him... -fades away revealing a gold treasure chest-
Mario: What's inside that I wonder.
Peewee: Let's open it and find out!
Toadster: Let's go!
Mario opens the chest and...
YOU GOT THE BOSS KEY!
Item Description: One of 7 keys needed to open the gate to Bowser's Castle. King Goomba had this one in his possesion.

END OF CHAPTER!
Mario and party have successfully overthrown King Goomba and his plans to rule Toad Town. Now with one Boss Key in tow, the three friends return to Merlon to find a clue as to the next Key's location.


Next Time on Paper Mario World... Mario and Co. return to Merlon.
 
Now that I look at this a little more, it sounds like it would make more sense as an RP then a story.
Chapter 1 Interlude
?: Bwahahha! Enjoying our hospitallity princess?
?: Not really Bowser.
Bowser: Well you better enjoy it Peach. Cause Mario's never giong to save you. Koopa!
Koopa: Yes?
Bowser: How's King Goomba?
Koopa: Shouldn't you ask a Goomba?
BOWSER: I ASKED YOU! NOW TELL ME!
Koopa: Ah! S-sorry to say... but K-King Goomba was defeated by M-Mario!
Bowser: WHAT?! Tell General Guy to attack him at once!
Koopa: He said something about getting a Shy Guy Mercenary to do the job. His name was...
Bowser: Don't say it here! There are people reading these text bubbles!
Koopa: Got it...
Next Time on Paper Mario World, Mario and Co. REALLY go see Merlon!
 
I'm gonna get a few remarks on how stupid this is from The Czar, but who cares?

Anyway last time on Paper Mario World, we had a tiny interlude while I pondered whether or not to continue with the story today. I think you got my answer by now.

Mario: That was quick trip back.
Merlon: Ah Mario! Come! You're timing is most convienient!
Toadster: Did you find anything?
Merlon: Best told in my house. Come!
At Merlon's...
Merlon: The nex Boss Key is at Shy Guy Boot Camp. Held by the infamous General Guy.
Peewee: So that's where we need to go...
Merlon: Be careful Mario, the general hired an assasin named Epic Guy to fight you. Let me give you something to help you out. -mutters magic words-
Mario: Woah!
Mario's Limit Gauge increased! Can now use Limit Fire Mario!
Fire Mario: immune to fire type attacks and burn status. All attacks have a chance to burn non-fire enemies. Can jump on fire enemies without being burned. Weak to explosions. Bomb-type enemies will explode on contact.
Merlon: Phew! That was exhausting.
Toadster: Shy Guy Boot Camp is to the south of Toad Town. Let's go when ready.
Mario: Alright.

Cutting it here. Chapter 2 to officially start tomorrow.
 
AejewsReflector said:
Still atrocious.
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Still don't have any suggestions to make it better, so it isn't going to change any time soon.
Anyway last time on Paper Mario World, Mario and Co. learned where the second Boss Key location is located. The trio now heads for Shy Guy Boot Camp to confront General Guy. Which means its epic voice time!
CHAPTER 2! Basic Straining!

Mario: Walking and walking, but I haven't seen anything yet.
Toadster: Its not like we can fly there or anything.
Peewee: What's that?
Mario: Weirdest bush I've ever seen.
Toadster: I think it's a Camo Guy.
Mario: Huh?
Camo Guy: Drat! I'm spotted! Shy Guys! Charge!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:17/20
FP:5/15
Limit Gauge:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Camo Guy
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Shy Guy A
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Shy Guy B
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Toadster: Shy Guys in general don't have anything unique about them. The Camo Guys have a high dodge rate. All Shy Guys can call reinforcements.

Mario Actions
Jump Menu
Hammer Menu
Items
Limit
Switch

Jump Menu
Jump
Multibounce
Power Jump

Mario tried Power Jumping Camo Guy
Camo Guy dodged!
Toadster rushed at Camo Guy with a spear.
Camo Guy dodged!
Camo Guy is hiding in the background.
Shy Guy A jumped!
Mario took 2 damage
Shy Guy B jumped!
Mario took 2 damage

Mario Stats
HP:13/20
FP:3/15
Limit Gauge:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Camo Guy
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Shy Guy A
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Shy Guy B
HP:5/5
FP:0/0

Mario tried Power Jumping Camo Guy!
Camo Guy took 4 damage!
Toadster threw his spear at Shy Guy A!
Shy Guy A took 2 damage!
Camo Guy fired his slingshot!
Mario took 2 damage!
Shy Guy A jumped!
Mario took 2 damage!
Shy Guy B jumped!
Toadster took 2 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:9/20
FP:1/15
Limit Gauge:1/2

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:9/10

Camo Guy
HP:1/5
FP:0/0

Shy Guy A
HP:3/5
FP:0/0

Shy Guy B
HP:5/5
FP:0/0


Mario tried hammering Camo Guy!
Camo Guy took K.O. damage!
Toadster rushed Shy Guy A with a spear.
Shy Guy A took 2 damage!
Shy Guy A jumped!
Mario took 2 damage!
Shy Guy B took 1 damage!
Shy Guy B: Who threw that rock?
Mario: Can we just finish this?

Mario Stats
HP:7/20
FP:1/15
Limit Gauge:1/2

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:9/10

Camo Guy
K.O.

Shy Guy A
HP:1/5
FP:0/0

Shy Guy B
HP:4/5
FP:0/0

Mario jumped!
Shy Guy A took K.O. damage!
Toadster rushed with his spear!
Shy Guy B took 2 damage!
Shy Guy B jumped!
Mario took 2 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:5/20
FP:1/15
Limit Gauge:1/2

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:9/10

Camo Guy
K.O.

Shy Guy A
K.O.

Shy Guy B
HP:2/5
FP:0/0

Mario swung the hammer at Shy Guy B!
Shy Guy B took K.O. damage!
Mario and Co. win!

Mario Exp: 200/200
Mario Leveled Up!
Jump base damage: 1->2
Mario Exp: 211/300
Toadster Exp: 192/200
Peewee Exp: 125/125
Peewee Leveled Up!
MAX FP: 15->20
Damage: 2->3

Mario: No doubt they were under the command of General Guy.
Toadster: So we're on the right track then.
Mario: Let's keep going then.

Next Time on Paper Mario World... Mario and Co. keep traveling to Shy Guy Boot Camp.
Note to Aegis: I'm sorry if you don't like this dialouge, but it hasn't changed since The Great Galaxy Race. So why are you complaining about it now?
 
Dude, this writing is just god awful. I can write better shit than this.

Go back to English 101.
 
^If that is so, then do it and show how to write a turn-based action adventure. And don't go all defensive if people start lacing it with criticism, helpful or damaging.

Your lack of constructive criticism is putting me off, and certainly doesn't help Billy/General Guy in any way.

AejewsReflector said:
Uh, I can write SHAKESPEARE and i'm 16, dude. :p
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If that's so, let's see you produce a five-act play then, in blank verse.



Now, to the main point of replies:

@Billy: I suppose you should flesh out story, you could include an Item shop stopover somewhere. Battle system is fine, unless you want to throw in crude humor mid-battle in certain fights.
I think it's carrying along well, but a bit battle-dominated. You need some more exploration without battles, maybe a puzzle or maze for the party to travel through
 
It was a glorious Summer afternoon.
But then, a shot rang out!

Thousands of people ran into the street!
It was Old Spice Guy, shooting out Old Spice from his bare armpits.

THE END
 
Don't worry H-J, I intened to have a shop in this episode anyway. SPOILERS!!!

Chapter 2! Episode 2!

Mario: Phew! I'm getting tired.
Peewee: Me too.
Toadster: I think I see an Inn over there. Let's go drop in.
?: Welcome to Mushroom Gorge Inn! How may we help you?
Mario: What services do you have?
Innkeeper: We have an Inn down here. Upstairs we have a shop and... OMG! You're Mario!
Mario: I get that a lot.
Innkeeper: Oh wow I can't believe Mario's here! Sorry though, you still have to pay.
Mario: -thinking- Rats! -speaking- how much?
Innkeeper: 20 coins per night. If you don't have money, you can go grind in Mushroom Gorge for hours for the cash.
Author's Note: Just like every RPG ever.
Mario: We'll do that.
At the entrance to Mushroom Gorge...
Toadster: This place is supposed to have a monster holding an enormous treasure. Many tried getting it, but all have either died or gotten lost inside the cave.
Mario: So we'll be doing something here after all!
Peewee: Let's go!
Mario and company keep going for hours fighting monsters that give no EXP but a total of 100 coins.
Mario: It should be enough. But I want to know what the treasure is.
Toadster: A sign. It says: "DANGER! MUSHIMIZER CAVE! DO NOT ENTER! Unless you're stupid or brave."
Peewee: Mushimizer?
Toadster: The monster that holds the treasure.
Mario: Let's go then!
Entering the maze...
Mario: The path branches to the left and right.
Peewee: Let's go left!
The trio marches for miles until...
Mario: A chest! -opens-
YOU GOT A BOMB!
Item Descirption: A Bomb. Use it in battle to deal damage or blow up a wall.
Mario: There's nothing else on this side, let's go back to the junction and go right.
Author's Note: Backtracking? That's more Chapter 4!
After going back to the junction then going right for 2 hours...
Mario: A crack on the wall. -places bomb-
BOOM! An opening appears...
Peewee: Let's go through.

Next time on Paper Mario World... the trio continue through Mushimizer Cave.
 
Chapter 2! Episode 3!
In the last episode, I forgot to post a small review of what happened in the last episode! Hu-zah.

Mario: This must be the cave where the monster sleeps.
Toadster: There's someone here.
Wario: Grrr... NO TREASURE!
Mario: Aw crap its Wario again!
Wario: Hm? It's you!
Mario: I guess this is torture for saying that.
BATTLE START!

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:15/15
Limit:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Wario
HP:35/35
FP:15/15

Toadster: He's gotten an HP increase. He also has a combo punch attack he does. Be careful, he still has his Limit.

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit
Switch
Hammer Menu
Hammer
Piercing Blow

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Wario took 3 damage!

Toadster rushed Wario with a spear!
Wario took 1 damage!

Wario 1-2 punched Mario!
Mario took 4 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:16/20
FP:13/15
Limit:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Wario
HP:31/35
FP:15/15

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Wario took 3 damage!

Toadster rushed Wario with a spear.
Wario took 1 damage

Wario turned Mario and Toadster into speed bumps!
Mario and Toadster took 2 damage each!

Mario Stats
HP:14/20
FP:13/15
Limit:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:10/10

Wario
HP:27/35
FP:13/15

Wario: You can't even scratch me? This is pathetic. Later loser!
Wario flees.
Mario: Coward.
Toadster: This rock seems out of place. It's also shiny looking!
Peewee: Let's keep it!
You Got The Shiny Stone!
Item Description: This item rip-off of Pokemon goes somewhere.
Peewee: There's a pillar there. It looks like a good place to put the stone.
Toadster: I'll do it.
Mario: WAIT!
Toadster: -places stone-
The room starts shaking.
?: GRRRRRRRARGH!
Toadster: Ah!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:14/20
FP:13/15
Limit:0/2

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:25/25

Mush Golem
HP:15/15
FP:0/0

Toadster: This thing'll stomp on you to attack! HELP ME!!!!

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit
Switch

Mario: This thing probably has High DEF. I'll try...

Hammer Menu
Hammer
Piercing Blow

Mario used Piercing Blow
Mush Golem took 3 damage!

Peewee used Putred Breath!
Mush Golem doesn't get Poisoned...

Mush Golem battered Mario with Toadster!
Mario took 4 damage!
Toadster took 4 damage!
Toadster: Ow....
Mario: Sheesh...

Mario Stats
HP:10/20
FP:11/15
Limit:0/2

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:24/25

Mush Golem
HP:12/15
FP:0/0

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Mush Golem took 3 damage!

Peewee used Icy Breath!
Mush Golem took 2 damage!

Mush Golem stomped on Mario!
Mario took 4 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:6/20
FP:11/15
Limit:1/2

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:22/25

Mush Golem
HP:7/15
FP:0/0

Peewee: It doesn't seem to have defense against Ice-Type moves.

Mario used the Super Mario Limit!
ATT+3, DEF+3

Peewee used Icy Breath!
Mush Golem took 2 damage!
Mush Golem got frozen!

Mario Stats
HP:6/20
FP:11/15
Limit:0/2
Status: ATT+3 DEF+3
Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:20/25

Mush Golem
HP:5/15
FP:0/0
Status: Frozen, 3 turns left

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Mush Golem took 6 damage!!
Peewee used Icy Breath
Mush Golem crumbled!
Mario and Peewee win!

Mario Exp: 261/300
Toadster Exp: 192/200*
Peewee Exp: 181/200
*Did not earn Exp this fight.

Toadster: Thanks Mario.
?: You not bad Mario.
Mario: Who are you?
?: Shy Guys!
Toadster: Wah!
Mario: Toadster! Where are you taking him?
?: If Toadster you want, bring me Boss Key from the Goomba Hills.
Peewee: Think that's Epic Guy?
Mario: I don't know who that was.
A Treasure Chest Appears!
Mario: Hmm? -opens chest-
You Got 500 Coins!
Mario: So that's the treasure of Mushimizer Cave. Let's go back to the inn.
At Mushroom Gorge Inn...
Innkeeper: WHAT?! Your friend was kiddnapped by Shy Guys?
Mario: Yeah.
Innkeeper: Well, as long as you beat that Mush Golem character, tourists might stop by the gorge again! That means more customers! I'll let you spend the night here for free. You'll need it to get your friend back.
*Your party feels totally refreshed!*
Mario: Let's go check out the store.
Shopkeeper: Welcome to Mushroom Gorge shop! We've got all the items you'll need for dungeon exploring!
Shop List
Super Shroom-10 coins
Snowman Doll-6 coins
Mystery-3 coins
Life Shroom-50 coins
Tasty Tonic-7 coins
Shroom Fry-6 coins
Courage Shell-15 coins
POW Block-7 coins

Mario: I'll take two Super Shrroms and 1 Shroom Fry!
Shopkeeper: Deal!
Super Shroom Descirption: Feel-great Mushroom. Heals 10 HP.
Shroom Fry Description: Fried Mushroom. Heals 6 HP and 2 FP.
Shopkeeper: Thanks for the business!

Next time on Paper Mario World. Mario and Peewee go hunt down the Shy Guys who kidnapped Toadster.
 
Billy12510 said:
Chapter 2! Episode 3!
In the last episode, I forgot to post a small review of what happened in the last episode! Hu-zah.

Mario: This must be the cave where the monster sleeps.
Toadster: There's someone here.
Wario: Grrr... NO TREASURE!
Mario: Aw crap its Wario again!
Wario: Hm? It's you!
Mario: I guess this is torture for saying that.
BATTLE START!

Mario Stats
HP:20/20
FP:15/15
Limit:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Wario
HP:35/35
FP:15/15

Toadster: He's gotten an HP increase. He also has a combo punch attack he does. Be careful, he still has his Limit.

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit
Switch
Hammer Menu
Hammer
Piercing Blow

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Wario took 3 damage!

Toadster rushed Wario with a spear!
Wario took 1 damage!

Wario 1-2 punched Mario!
Mario took 4 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:16/20
FP:13/15
Limit:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:15/15
FP:10/10

Wario
HP:31/35
FP:15/15

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Wario took 3 damage!

Toadster rushed Wario with a spear.
Wario took 1 damage

Wario turned Mario and Toadster into speed bumps!
Mario and Toadster took 2 damage each!

Mario Stats
HP:14/20
FP:13/15
Limit:0/2

Toadster Stats
HP:13/15
FP:10/10

Wario
HP:27/35
FP:13/15

Wario: You can't even scratch me? This is pathetic. Later loser!
Wario flees.
Mario: Coward.
Toadster: This rock seems out of place. It's also shiny looking!
Peewee: Let's keep it!
You Got The Shiny Stone!
Item Description: This item rip-off of Pokemon goes somewhere.
Peewee: There's a pillar there. It looks like a good place to put the stone.
Toadster: I'll do it.
Mario: WAIT!
Toadster: -places stone-
The room starts shaking.
?: GRRRRRRRARGH!
Toadster: Ah!
BATTLE START!
Mario Stats
HP:14/20
FP:13/15
Limit:0/2

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:25/25

Mush Golem
HP:15/15
FP:0/0

Toadster: This thing'll stomp on you to attack! HELP ME!!!!

Mario Actions
Jump
Hammer
Item
Limit
Switch

Mario: This thing probably has High DEF. I'll try...

Hammer Menu
Hammer
Piercing Blow

Mario used Piercing Blow
Mush Golem took 3 damage!

Peewee used Putred Breath!
Mush Golem doesn't get Poisoned...

Mush Golem battered Mario with Toadster!
Mario took 4 damage!
Toadster took 4 damage!
Toadster: Ow....
Mario: Sheesh...

Mario Stats
HP:10/20
FP:11/15
Limit:0/2

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:24/25

Mush Golem
HP:12/15
FP:0/0

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Mush Golem took 3 damage!

Peewee used Icy Breath!
Mush Golem took 2 damage!

Mush Golem stomped on Mario!
Mario took 4 damage!

Mario Stats
HP:6/20
FP:11/15
Limit:1/2

Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:22/25

Mush Golem
HP:7/15
FP:0/0

Peewee: It doesn't seem to have defense against Ice-Type moves.

Mario used the Super Mario Limit!
ATT+3, DEF+3

Peewee used Icy Breath!
Mush Golem took 2 damage!
Mush Golem got frozen!

Mario Stats
HP:6/20
FP:11/15
Limit:0/2
Status: ATT+3 DEF+3
Peewee Stats
HP:10/10
FP:20/25

Mush Golem
HP:5/15
FP:0/0
Status: Frozen, 3 turns left

Mario used Piercing Blow!
Mush Golem took 6 damage!!
Peewee used Icy Breath
Mush Golem crumbled!
Mario and Peewee win!

Mario Exp: 261/300
Toadster Exp: 192/200*
Peewee Exp: 181/200
*Did not earn Exp this fight.

Toadster: Thanks Mario.
?: You not bad Mario.
Mario: Who are you?
?: Shy Guys!
Toadster: Wah!
Mario: Toadster! Where are you taking him?
?: If Toadster you want, bring me Boss Key from the Goomba Hills.
Peewee: Think that's Epic Guy?
Mario: I don't know who that was.
A Treasure Chest Appears!
Mario: Hmm? -opens chest-
You Got 500 Coins!
Mario: So that's the treasure of Mushimizer Cave. Let's go back to the inn.
At Mushroom Gorge Inn...
Innkeeper: WHAT?! Your friend was kiddnapped by Shy Guys?
Mario: Yeah.
Innkeeper: Well, as long as you beat that Mush Golem character, tourists might stop by the gorge again! That means more customers! I'll let you spend the night here for free. You'll need it to get your friend back.
*Your party feels totally refreshed!*
Mario: Let's go check out the store.
Shopkeeper: Welcome to Mushroom Gorge shop! We've got all the items you'll need for dungeon exploring!
Shop List
Super Shroom-10 coins
Snowman Doll-6 coins
Mystery-3 coins
Life Shroom-50 coins
Tasty Tonic-7 coins
Shroom Fry-6 coins
Courage Shell-15 coins
POW Block-7 coins

Mario: I'll take two Super Shrroms and 1 Shroom Fry!
Shopkeeper: Deal!
Super Shroom Descirption: Feel-great Mushroom. Heals 10 HP.
Shroom Fry Description: Fried Mushroom. Heals 6 HP and 2 HP.
Shopkeeper: Thanks for the business!

Next time on Paper Mario World. Mario and Peewee go hunt down the Shy Guys who kidnapped Toadster.
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You accidentally wrote for Shroom Fry heals 6 HP and 2 HP.
 
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