It still sucks.
fix pls
fix pls
Paper Mario World: Ch.3 Magical Mischief!
- Thread starter Billy12510
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THIS STORY SOUNDS LIKE CHEWBACCA TAKING A SHIIIIIT.
I'm a gamer not a miracle worker. I need suggestions.Snowy The Czar said:
Go play in traffic. Then you'd be contirbuting more to the story.Kagami said:
Steve the Trooper said:
Why don't you go die in a fire, you bumbling faggit.
I think an episode needs more than one event or battle. Otherwise it's way too linear.
@Aegis: please shut mouf. Your rambling is an eyesore. Ulnless you want to dropkick yourself by a dinosaur and fly into the cauldron.
@Aegis: please shut mouf. Your rambling is an eyesore. Ulnless you want to dropkick yourself by a dinosaur and fly into the cauldron.
H-J カービイ said:
I'll stop when you stop stealing other people's jokes and catchphrases.
Chapter 3! Episode 3!
Last time Mario and Peewee got tricked into a trap by Red Goomba, who they assumed was dead as of the end of Chapter 1.
Toadster: They've been gone for a long time. Surely a few Goombas isn't that much for Mario to handle.
?: Wanna bet?
Toadster: Oh kwih! It's Red Goomba again!
Author's Note: "Oh kwih?" What?
Red Goomba: It's payback time.
BATTLE START!
Toadster Stats
HP:11/15
FP:10/10
Red Goomba
HP:9/9
FP:3/3
H.Spiky Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2
H.Spiky Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2
H.Spiky Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2
Giant Goomba
HP:5/5
FP:0/0
Toadster: How is anyone supposed to win against these odds?
Red Goomba: Either we fight or you get in the cage with your friends.
Toadster: Grr... ! I got it!
Toadster uses Mega Shot!
All enemies take 8 damage!
Red Goomba: Wha-what was that?
Toadster: I shot SPEARS at you with my Composite Bow.
Red Goomba: Who woulda thought a Toad had this much spunk. I give! -runs-
Toadster Won!
Toadster Exp: 277/300
Toadster: ??? He dropped some key.
You got the Cage Key!
Item Description: A Key that opens a cage inside the Goomba House.
Toadster: Hm... where does this go? Maybe Merlon knows.
Toad Town Mall
Goomba Hills+Kamek's Library
Merlon's House
At Merlon's...
Merlon: Toadster? Where's Mario?
Toadster: That's my problem. Do you know where this goes?
Merlon: No... but have you tried that bizzare house that showed up near the mall?
Toadster: Thanks I will.
Back at the intersection...
Toadster: What does this sign say? "Just a house. Not a Goomba outpost. Go away!" Realllllll smrt.
Toadster: -opens door- There you two are.
Mario: Just get us down!
Toadster: Calm down... its simple. Oh there's a lock on that cage.
Mario: Surprising for a bunch of Goomba's huh?
Toadster: Yeah. -unlocks cage door-
Mario and Peewee rejoined your party.
Toadster: Come out here guys!
Mario: NO! Those guys need to pay. I'm not leaving till Red Goomba's finally crushed beneath my feet. That's that.
Toadster: If you must...
Mario opens doors all throughout Goomba House... but doesn't find Red Goomba anywhere.
Mario: Coward.
Toadster: Now will you-
Peewee: Hey guys!
Mario: Come on!
Peewee: Look at this Red Pepper!
Toadster: I wouldn't eat that if I were you. It looks hot enough to make you spit fire!
Mario: That might come in hand actually, after all he already has Poison Breath AND Icy Breath. It's only natural if you ask me.
Peewee: Yeah! -eats the Pepper- YEOWCH! -spits fireballs cross the kitchen-
Toadster: Maybe we should've waited till we got outside...
-structure fails slightly-
Mario: Run for it!
Toadster: How? The front door's blocked!
Will the Heroes make it out alive? Who knows?
Last time Mario and Peewee got tricked into a trap by Red Goomba, who they assumed was dead as of the end of Chapter 1.
Toadster: They've been gone for a long time. Surely a few Goombas isn't that much for Mario to handle.
?: Wanna bet?
Toadster: Oh kwih! It's Red Goomba again!
Author's Note: "Oh kwih?" What?
Red Goomba: It's payback time.
BATTLE START!
Toadster Stats
HP:11/15
FP:10/10
Red Goomba
HP:9/9
FP:3/3
H.Spiky Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2
H.Spiky Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2
H.Spiky Goomba
HP:7/7
FP:2/2
Giant Goomba
HP:5/5
FP:0/0
Toadster:
How is anyone supposed to win against these odds?Red Goomba: Either we fight or you get in the cage with your friends.
Toadster: Grr... ! I got it!
Toadster uses Mega Shot!
All enemies take 8 damage!
Red Goomba: Wha-what was that?
Toadster: I shot SPEARS at you with my Composite Bow.
Red Goomba: Who woulda thought a Toad had this much spunk. I give! -runs-
Toadster Won!
Toadster Exp: 277/300
Toadster: ??? He dropped some key.
You got the Cage Key!
Item Description: A Key that opens a cage inside the Goomba House.
Toadster: Hm... where does this go? Maybe Merlon knows.
Toad Town Mall
Goomba Hills+Kamek's Library
Merlon's House
At Merlon's...
Merlon: Toadster? Where's Mario?
Toadster: That's my problem. Do you know where this goes?
Merlon: No... but have you tried that bizzare house that showed up near the mall?
Toadster: Thanks I will.
Back at the intersection...
Toadster: What does this sign say? "Just a house. Not a Goomba outpost. Go away!" Realllllll smrt.
Toadster: -opens door- There you two are.
Mario: Just get us down!
Toadster: Calm down... its simple. Oh there's a lock on that cage.
Mario: Surprising for a bunch of Goomba's huh?
Toadster: Yeah. -unlocks cage door-
Mario and Peewee rejoined your party.
Toadster: Come out here guys!
Mario: NO! Those guys need to pay. I'm not leaving till Red Goomba's finally crushed beneath my feet. That's that.
Toadster: If you must...
Mario opens doors all throughout Goomba House... but doesn't find Red Goomba anywhere.
Mario: Coward.
Toadster: Now will you-
Peewee: Hey guys!
Mario: Come on!
Peewee: Look at this Red Pepper!
Toadster: I wouldn't eat that if I were you. It looks hot enough to make you spit fire!
Mario: That might come in hand actually, after all he already has Poison Breath AND Icy Breath. It's only natural if you ask me.
Peewee: Yeah! -eats the Pepper- YEOWCH! -spits fireballs cross the kitchen-
Toadster: Maybe we should've waited till we got outside...
-structure fails slightly-
Mario: Run for it!
Toadster: How? The front door's blocked!
Will the Heroes make it out alive? Who knows?
You are a moral failure of the highest calibre.
Chapter 3 Episode 4!
Last time Mario and Co. set Goomba house on fire. Now. Will they live?
Mario: Yes! We will live!
Toadster: Video Game Logic prevents the protaganists from killing themselves!
And everyone runs out.
Peewee: Wow. I haven't had such a scary experience in a long time!
Mario: ? When was that?
Peewee: I shouldn't tawk about it. I might have nightmaers.
Mario: No go ahead! We've got time.
Toadster: This coming from the guy who didn't want to money grind for a map.
Peewee: You sure we have time? This may take awhile.
Mario: No we have time. Only the fate of the world is at stake. We got plenty of time.
Peewee: Alright. It took place 2 years after I was born.
Toadster: How old are you anyway?
Peewee: 4.
Toadster: Alright. Continue.
Peewee: It all took place in my home in Woody Woods. Mommy and Daddy were fighting about something. I was playing outside.
Peewee's Mom: I absoultely won't go. Not when Peewee is still so young...
Peewee's Dad: I agree, but what choice do we have?
Peewee's Mom: Not unless someone looks after Peewee.
Peewee: Whee! Whee hee! Whee ha!
Peewee's Dad: Huh? What's going on out ther- PEEWEE!
Peewee's Mom: Put him down you stupid Klepto!
Peewee (future): That Klepto ride was fun. Looking back, that's probably the last time I've had fun in 2 years.
Author's Note: Wait, being in a Billy12510 story isn't fun?
Peewee: Now isn't too much fun either, since I almost killed you guys.
Mario: S*** like that's been happening to me for 20 so years now, its no problem.
Toadster: Mario! Watch your language!
Peewee: Oh right. Anyway..
Peewee (past): Daddy! Mommy! This is fun!
Peewee's Dad: No its not! Klepto's will try eating you!
Klepto: See ya. -flys off-
Peewee's Mom: No! My little Peewee Piranha!
?: Now that the brat's gone, what's stopping you from joining Bowser's army!
Peewee's Dad: This was a set-up. Wasn't it?
?: Yeah. Now come with us!
Peewee's Mom: NO!
Mario: I've said it before, Bowser's a jerk.
Peewee: Yeah. Wanna hear the rest?
Mario: Maybe later. We've got an adventure to resume! And we gotta find your parents!
Peewee: Yeah! Let's go!
Toadster: Alright then! The sign there says Kamek's Library is -> that way.
Last time Mario and Co. set Goomba house on fire. Now. Will they live?
Mario: Yes! We will live!
Toadster: Video Game Logic prevents the protaganists from killing themselves!
And everyone runs out.
Peewee: Wow. I haven't had such a scary experience in a long time!
Mario: ? When was that?
Peewee: I shouldn't tawk about it. I might have nightmaers.
Mario: No go ahead! We've got time.
Toadster: This coming from the guy who didn't want to money grind for a map.
Peewee: You sure we have time? This may take awhile.
Mario: No we have time. Only the fate of the world is at stake. We got plenty of time.
Peewee: Alright. It took place 2 years after I was born.
Toadster: How old are you anyway?
Peewee: 4.
Toadster: Alright. Continue.
Peewee: It all took place in my home in Woody Woods. Mommy and Daddy were fighting about something. I was playing outside.
Peewee's Mom: I absoultely won't go. Not when Peewee is still so young...
Peewee's Dad: I agree, but what choice do we have?
Peewee's Mom: Not unless someone looks after Peewee.
Peewee: Whee! Whee hee! Whee ha!
Peewee's Dad: Huh? What's going on out ther- PEEWEE!
Peewee's Mom: Put him down you stupid Klepto!
Peewee (future): That Klepto ride was fun. Looking back, that's probably the last time I've had fun in 2 years.
Author's Note: Wait, being in a Billy12510 story isn't fun?
Peewee: Now isn't too much fun either, since I almost killed you guys.
Mario: S*** like that's been happening to me for 20 so years now, its no problem.
Toadster: Mario! Watch your language!
Peewee: Oh right. Anyway..
Peewee (past): Daddy! Mommy! This is fun!
Peewee's Dad: No its not! Klepto's will try eating you!
Klepto: See ya. -flys off-
Peewee's Mom: No! My little Peewee Piranha!
?: Now that the brat's gone, what's stopping you from joining Bowser's army!
Peewee's Dad: This was a set-up. Wasn't it?
?: Yeah. Now come with us!
Peewee's Mom: NO!
Mario: I've said it before, Bowser's a jerk.
Peewee: Yeah. Wanna hear the rest?
Mario: Maybe later. We've got an adventure to resume! And we gotta find your parents!
Peewee: Yeah! Let's go!
Toadster: Alright then! The sign there says Kamek's Library is -> that way.
Just a tip, writing like this (Character limits your description and brings down the quality of the story.
Try using quotations.
limits your description and brings down the quality of the story.Try using quotations.
But I've always done my stories like this. Well, that isn't entirely true. There are those few chapters in "Super Circuit" that has smileys and a colon when someone speaks. But still, I don't think I'll change the way I write stories like that.MattC13 said:Just a tip, writing like this (Character
Try using quotations.
This story blows. You can help it by not posting any more material.
Again, if I do that you win. I want you to lose this fight.Kagami said:
P.S. You already have lost this fight, I'm not stopping just because 1 person hates it with their entire soul.
Ohhhh, you will eventually.
And when that time comes, I will be there, laughing at your pathetic existence to write such trite and horrendous pieces of literature that makes thy soul burn with wretched infernos of boiling flames.
And when that time comes, I will be there, laughing at your pathetic existence to write such trite and horrendous pieces of literature that makes thy soul burn with wretched infernos of boiling flames.
So you're saying I'm going to hell? I guess I got nothing to lose then!Kagami said:
Ch.3 Episode 5!
Last time on Paper Mario World, Peewee told the story of what happened to him while his parents were kidnapped.
Mario: We've been running without a sign for a while now.
Toadster: Well you said you've been there before.
Peewee: Tell us boss! Where is it.
Mario: Hmm...
?: You're looking for Kamek's Library right?
Mario: Yeah. Who are you?
?: I am Magi. The Red Magikoopa assistant to Kamella.
Magi: Or at least I was. I was kicked out of the library after I failed too many times at dealing with that bean-brain Fawful.
Mario: Oh really.
Magi: I'm so mad now! I want revenge. I figure you guys could help me get said revenge.
Mario: What's in it for us?
Magi: Help me with my revenge and you got yourselves this. -holds out Boss Key-
Peewee: Where'd you get that?
Magi: I swiped it from Kamella before I was kicked out. I thought I'd use it for leverage, but I never got the chance.
Mario: Let's see... a disgruntled ex-minion, an item that we need to get through the story, and a person with a general layout of the next area? That's all the requirements of a former enemy partner if ever I've seen one. We're in.
Magi: Alright...
Magi joined your party!
Magi's Skills:
Fireball: Shoots fireball- Costs 1FP
Heal: Heal's Magi or Mario 5 HP- Costs 5FP
Magi: If you're looking for Kamek's Library, you'll need to go through DK Jungle first.
Mario: I thought that was it.
Magi: If anything, have a Tasty Tonic with you. There's all sorts of weird plants in the jungle.
Peewee: Hey! I'm a plant you know!
Magi: So-rry! Calm down.
Mario: I think we have one. Do we?
Ooh... I don't think so... well RPGs like the one this is based off of tend to give you the items you need right when you absoulutely need them, so who cares?
STILL SUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCKS
Not to sound mean or anything, but why would you think of a partner who has their first move that requires FP? It's just.... weird.
Yoshi8984 said:
because it sux
It's going to continue to be poor if you don't write it in a proper format.
Or if you keep on annoying members.